Topic Sentence RevisionRevise three of your topic sentences so you have a “before” and “after” version of the sa

Topic Sentence RevisionRevise three of your topic sentences so you have a “before” and “after” version of the same TS. Make the after version as strong as you can. You can pull the first “before” version from the paragraphs you have already turned in. You will ultimately have 6 TS’s total, 3 “bad” and 3 better ones.Those two pictures are the introductions. Those two documents are my previous paragraphs.


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Exorcist is a story based on the life of a teenage girl who gets possessed with the demons
and comes to a conclusion with top priest exorcizing the demons. By highlighting disfranchised
family relationships, Blatty seemingly presents that other than the real existence of demons,
these demons take advantage of the breakdown of social institutions to cause havoc in the
society. Blatty vividly shows this point when he presents Chris as a divorced woman who had
separated from her husband who is also an actor ” Separated from her actor husband holy wood
actress Chris McNeil and her preteen daughter are in Washington Dc on an extended location
shoot for a movie called crush course” (Blatty 8). Chris is not only divorced she is also a working
mother and a liberal actor. It is her liberalism that forces a separation between her and her
daughter which seems to have led to her daughter first getting physically sick to the point that
she becomes so weak and easy possessed by the demons.
Blatty further shows the impacts of a dysfunctional family by explaining that even
though Chris continuously hears some noise from the attic, she assumes that they might be some
small rats. “Rats in the attic, for pete’s sake! Rats!” (Blatty 2). He presents an image of a mother
who is not w deeply concerned about the wellbeing of her child. Implicitly mentioned, if only
Chris had been committed mother and a wife, she could have dedicated her efforts to care for her
family and allow her husband to provide but she got deeply involved in her actin role that can be
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seen when Blatty writes “They’d completed the interiors in Hollywood and all that remained to
be filmed were few exterior scenes on the campus of Georgetown university starting tomorrow.
Heavy lids. She was getting drowsy” (Blatty1). If just their family was well functional, they
could have prevented Reagan from being possessed. Blatty further shows the devil takes
advantage of a dysfunctional social institution by presenting how Father Karass’ mother dwells in
poverty and eventually dies because she can barely afford a quality healthcare services.
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Work Cited
Blatty, William P. Exorcist. London : Transworld Digital, 2011.
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Chapter six of the book exorcist continues with the story of a teenage girl possessed with
demons. In this chapter, Blatty significantly shows the significance of religions in society. By
showing the conversation between Father Damien Karass and Lieutenant William Kinderman,
Blatty shows that religious leaders have a significant role in in the human community. While
religion is opium, religious leaders have a substantial purpose of providing advice and guiding
people.
When the Lieutenant takes the initiative to look for the man of God while jogging, Blatty
openly in show how important religious person can be “father Karass, Kinderman called to him
hoarsely” (Blatty 1). The priest turned around and tearlessly nodded, squinting into the sunlight
as he waited for the homicide detective to reach him.”
Blatty further shows the importance of religion in the society at the point where detective
Kinderman opens up and confess a murder to Father Karras. He, however, tells the pries that this
should be a secret between them “You mean murder? Yes, I enjoy it” (Blatty 2).
Blatty also shows the role of religion in the society in the conversation where the
detective question father Karras about witchcraft.” listen, what do you know about witchcraft?”
the detective asked (Blatty 3). Even though the detective suspects that a film director Burke
Dennings died due to witchcraft, he does not understand what it is all about. By seeking more
information about witchcraft from the priest, Blaty plainly shows that religion plays an essential
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role in explaining the spiritual world and matters of faith that people do not readily understand in
real life. Through the rest of the chapter, Father Karras helps the detective to unfold unique
stories that relate to demonic murders.
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Work Cited
Blatty, William P. Exorcist. London: Transworld Digital, 2011.
TS Checklist
NO DEADALY PLURALS
Is there a “Blatty argues” formulation
Did you isolate specific characters (not all characters are the same)
Did you avoid sweeping statements like “throughout the entire
novel”
Did you push the TS past an observation or description-can
someone disagree?
Did you both anchor yourself to the novel and also pivot out of the
novel?
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Complete the following in the Canvas discussion section: Topic
Sentence Revision
Revise three of your topic sentences so you have a “before” and “after”
version of the same TS. Make the after version as strong as you can. YOU
can pull the first “before” version from the paragraphs you have already
turned in. You will ultimately have 6 TS’s total, 3 “bad” and 3 better ones.
Due by Thursday at 2pm. Worth 6 points.
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